Lesser concerns for revising essay 1

There a number of strengths I felt my essay had, but overall there were a number of concerns. The least of my concerns includes a lot of the content I included. I felt that I kept the reader in the loop most of the time by mildly explaining some of the rating the pertain to videos games, like E, T and M. these rating are very important to my topic. I kept my explanations brief but informative. If I included too much information of each it would have taken away from the main subject of the essay. The analysis of the image itself seemed to be cohesive and in good detail. Overall the concerns for essay one vary but I think i can pull through and make it it an overall good revised essay.