Friday, November 9, 2012

revised thesis from essay 1

The image exhibited above uses elements of satire to show violence is incorporated in everyday video gaming mainstream. By showing elements of violence and adult content combined with favorite childhood characters of  the popular and all ages appropriate from the Mario franchise, the designer seeks to show the negative correlation of violent games and children. The characters included in the image are also a part of one of the highest selling video game franchises of all time. Thus association of  one of the top selling games with adult violence strengthens the notion that violence is becoming more and more popular with younger audiences.
I chose to revise my essay with some extra content because I don't think my original was as cohesive in its content. I also removed some words that I though were not necessary. I also added some extra words to replace them and to expand the sentence. The last sentence in the thesis was newly added. I added it because I though it fit nicely.

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