http://www.politico.com/news/stories/0812/80398_Page2.html
Rand Paul thinks that Obamacare is unconstitutional and that even the father of the constitution would agree with him. He feels that the debate is not new and probably will never be over any time soon. He talks about how Hamilton and Madison fought from the beginning about how the government would be limited by the enumerated powers (his words). He feels the federal governments powers are few and defined. For example the power to tax and spend is restricted by the enumerated powers. He feels the only way to fix the problem is to have a new president.
Overall, I think this is a good body paragraph. Where you say "(his word)" you should put the quote in quotation marks and then say something like "Paul states," or something to that effect. I believe it will make your example stronger. There are also a few places where you should add commas. You did a good job explaining why you think Paul feels the way he does. Almost all your sentences start with "He" maybe you should try to rework them so you are not so repetitive. Other than that I think this will be a very strong paragraph for your essay.
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