1.
Yes he has a clearly stated thesis , "Despite
the expense, colleges should make every effort to create green campuses because
by doing so they will improve their own educational environment, ensure their
own institution's survival, and help solve the global climate crisis." "Despite
the expense, colleges should make every effort to create green campuses because
by doing so they will improve their own educational environment, ensure their
own institution's survival, and help solve the global climate crisis."
2.
Yes they are quite clear and concise and he
for the most part does well at building his arguments around them.
3.
This is where I was unhappy with the
information he provides he does a decent job at giving you the historic background
of “Green”, however his facts, examples, and statistics could have been much
more convincing if he had gone into a little more detail.
4.
His refutes were weak to me throwing numbers
at me attempting to mean something because it sounds impressive at 12 million
pounds. The numbers don’t translate to me if he had used an example of what 12
million pounds of carbon emissions was equivalent to (which is close to having
1100 cars off the road for a year.) I would have been able to relate and
understand more.
5.
Yes he does a good job at transitioning topic
to topic and in a manner that makes sense to me. It is very easy to follow his thoughts as he
is building his arguments.
6.
Yes and no in everything up to the opposing
arguments he did great but both refutation and his conclusion needed some
tweaking.
7.
“Now is the time for schools to make the
choice and pledge to go green.” It does
remind me of the essay’s main idea, and the sentence before it is strong and gives
you a little more to think about so I would consider it a strong conclusion
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